Title: Twisted Lines
Author: Nox
Fandom: Primeval
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Not mine. No offence or liability intended
Base Story: First Nick, Now Stephen
Base Author: [livejournal.com profile] rodlox 
Summary: One step can change the future.
Notes/Warnings: Character Death. Written for the Remix challenge.


The lines had shifted just a little, sideways and upwards and just slightly off their track but as enumerable philosophers have observed it only takes one small moment to change the course of history.


And it was a small moment, almost imperceptible, one slight movement by one man as they chased the dodos, he stepped right instead of left (turn right, split the lines) and everything changed. He blocked the dodo that had headed towards the door and in doing so he doomed Nick (dead but breathing).


Nick’s smile was bright and slightly manic, high on adrenaline and Oh My God can you believe it. Smile shining up and happy beyond all measurement, even when one of the birds turned its head and bit him, beak coming down hard on his hand (changes, changes, lines scrubbed out and redrawn).


He yelped but his smile didn’t fade, he just waggled his injured hand at the creature as though admonishing it (I looked and beheld a pale house and his name that sat upon him was Death).


But Ryan had grown cautious at the bite and they forced the Dodos back early (another change, another line) and they all passed through the anomaly alive.


Tom was never bitten, Abby never kidnapped (lives unwound, pain never felt) but Nick never found the parasite and it fought his brain for control like another personality, one which embraced his hate and anger, but unlike Tom in some ways Nick didn’t want to fight it (descent into darkness, madness swirling with colours). So he lost.


He tracked Helen down, his primal self succeeding where his conscious (controlled) self never could. Stalked her to her lair and sank his teeth into her skin, tearing, blood in his mouth. She killed him, her knife in his neck, his teeth still locked into her flesh (she owned his death, just as she owned his life).


She went primal two days later and the parasite used her body to spread itself far and wide, into everything that would sustain it, and a lot that wouldn’t. She was prey turned predator but as the days wore on her body was collapsing underneath her and in a moment she was not quite fast enough, muscles degenerating, not quite smart enough, her brain liquefying (food, nourishment), not quite agile enough, her nerves frying and suddenly she was prey again.  


The parasite flourished, failed, found its niche and stayed, endured (what came first, the chicken or the egg?). 


They’d tracked them down, (duty, honour, fear of doing it alone?) found the corpses rotting in the past and they dragged them home, placed Helen in her empty grave with a lying stone and her husband (murderer, victim) beside her.


The Cutters became just another name, just black ink on white paper somewhere, a list of the victims, and on other lists, hers villainous, his heroic, (and in which the hero became our death) just names, spoken and whispered and eventually dulled and forgotten.


Their lines twisted and broken, their stories untold, their reality now belonging to someone new.  


From: [identity profile] rodlox.livejournal.com



I like how you put those - asides? - in the parenthesis. actually I like the whole thing.

hurts my head to read it, but that just means its not an easy read - and a "not an easy read" doesn't come along on a daily basis.

*bows to you*
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

Re: <-glompings

I just called it abusing parentheses :P. I'm glad you liked it I wanted to make it a little esoteric and I guess I managed it. Thanks :D

From: [identity profile] rodlox.livejournal.com

Re: <-glompings

you gave the background to a comment in my fic; I rewrote yours. very fun!

(and you gave me an idea for another remix of yours - may I?)

ps: what's "esoteric"?
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

Re: <-glompings

Feel very free :D

Esoteric kind of means cryptic, unusual, cosmic.
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From: [personal profile] fififolle

Wow! Great style. Very scary, horrible! Cutter tracking Helen down with the parasite fuelling him... *shudder* Excellent. This makes the original look like fun *g*
Nice one!
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

*Grin* thanks, I think I was indulging my angsty slightly insane side when I wrote this, so i'm glad you like it.
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

*Grin* I'm glad you enjoyed it, i think i can blame watching 'Turn Left' from Dr Who season 4 a few to many times.

From: [identity profile] lukadreaming.livejournal.com

Ooh, that's very powerful and intense! I like the way you've developed the original.
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

Thanks, It was good, I was expecting to have to work quite hard at finding something to rewrite but this just jumped out at me. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

Thanks, It was interesting to try and focus on creating a mood rather than on detail like i usually do, nice to know it worked.

From: [identity profile] ladydevon.livejournal.com

Incredible fic. Wonderful way to show how one small change can have devestating results. Well Done!
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

*Grin* I did think it would have more impact if it was a very small thing that had changed, not even something you'd notice in real time, it gives the fic a lovely fatalistic tone that I like, so i'm glad you enjoyed it.

From: [identity profile] fredbassett.livejournal.com

WOW! Bloody impressive! Painful and fantastic, at the same time. Rodlox is right, not an easy read, but in a good way, not a bad.
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From: [identity profile] noxnoctisanima.livejournal.com

Thanks :D It seems I was feeling a little angsty when I wrote this :P But it's nice to see it worked out well.


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